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PostSubject: Flying love   Flying love I_icon_minitimeSun Mar 21, 2010 1:33 am

If love is for the birds,
now I'm telling you.
If love is for the birds
then let me fly away with you.
From the morning in the sun,
until the day is done.
If love is for the birds,
then let me fly away with you.
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PostSubject: Re: Flying love   Flying love I_icon_minitimeSun Mar 21, 2010 11:47 pm

I like the simplicity of this piece. You say it all in a few lines instead of droning on and on. Don't get me wrong, some poems need to be longer. However, you captured all the feelings in this sample. Was this written for someone in particular?
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PostSubject: Re: Flying love   Flying love I_icon_minitimeMon Mar 22, 2010 7:44 am

When I wrote it (wich was a long long time ago) it was ment for someone. Alas my wings were wax and I didn't fly so well.
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PostSubject: Re: Flying love   Flying love I_icon_minitimeMon Mar 22, 2010 8:17 am

Aw. I'm sorry to hear that.
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PostSubject: Re: Flying love   Flying love I_icon_minitimeFri Mar 26, 2010 10:25 pm

its a very good poem i like how u were able to say what you ment in very little words and i have many poems like urs you wont be the only one who has some like tht i wish to be able to read more of wht u have wrote i will be posting new ones every soon
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